Krissy Marrinan
Forensics
December 1st 2013
Current Events
DNA
and Human Trafficking
Chris Asplen
In this article, Chris Asplen talks about DNA and how it
has benefited the criminal justice system. Asplen explains how DNA is used to
solve cold cases and help the Innocence Project; a project where they release
wrongfully convicted people. He also goes into detail how human trafficking has
gotten worse and that the process has become similar to that of booking a trip
to “Disneyland”. Asplen explains that
having DNA as a resource will help put a stop to trafficking because it gives
the victims, a little encouragement and safety, to use their voice to stand up
against their abusers. By supporting the victims, police have the chance to
start to understand the patterns of the traffickers and possibly identify some
of the criminals. Asplen hopes that somehow DNA will put and end to human
trafficking and all injustice that has previously happened.
The
information in this article really opened my eyes to the possibility that human
trafficking could come to screeching halt if DNA could play a role in capturing
the horrible criminals. “At a profit margin of $32 billion a year,
second in magnitude only to trafficking of illegal drugs, as many as 27 million
men, women, and children are victims of modern slavery”. From this quote, it is
clear that human trafficking is a real problem, and somehow needs to stop.
Young teenage girls are the target for human trafficking and this effect many
of us, because we all know someone who is a young teen, and realizing that
someone her age is going through this is horrifying.
Though
I agree with much of what Chris Asplen is writing, I though some of the points
that he was making were not connected to what I originally thought the article
was going to be about, so it mislead me a little bit. But overall I really thought that Asplen made
a compelling argument to why DNA could really put a dent in human trafficking.
http://www.forensicmag.com/articles/2013/08/dna-and-human-trafficking#.UptWD6Wn3wI
Asplen, Chris. "Forensic Magazine." Forensic Magazine., 28 Aug. 2013. Web. 01 Dec. 2013.
17 comments:
I thought Krissy's review of the article "DNA and Human Trafficking" was really interesting. Her use of transitional sentences flowed very nicely. Her approach was engaging and was easy to follow. Also, her descriptive sentences were very forward and easy to understand, which helped me process the whole idea without excess information. Although her review was well-presented, Krissy could have used some extra help in some aspects. Her use of repetitive words was confusing and the grammar was off in some places. Before reading this review, I didn't know that human trafficking was very easy, but also that the process "has become similar to that of booking a trip to “Disneyland”. Overall, I think she did a really good job.
Krissy, this was a great summary of a complicated and controversial subject. As you pointed out, this article pertains to all of us because we can all think of a teenage girl and imagine someone her age going through this. For that reason, I was really interested in this article. As in your last summary, I think you generally do a really good job of keeping your summaries short and easy to understand. You did a great job of talking about both DNA, and human trafficking. In addition, I really liked that you not only went into the scientific aspects of this issue, but also touched on the moral aspects. I can see that you really cared about this topic. It’s easy to see how the two different topics may have mislead you, as I got confused in your summary as well, but you did a great job making it flow together and connecting the topics. I learned a lot about this topic too. I’d never thought about the idea of using DNA to stop human trafficking, and this could be a revolutionary idea. I also think that it was good that you included the magnitude at which this is occurring, I had no clue it was such a huge business. Although you had a great summary, there were definitely some issues that could have been easily fixed. I noticed some misspellings and grammatical issues, but they weren’t big problems at all. Other than that, you really did do a great job summarizing your article, so good job.
Overall, I thought Krissy did a good job in reviewing the article. For one, I thought that she did a good job in keeping the review short and simple, yet it still got the most important information to the reader. I am sure that she could have written an essay on the topic but managed to keep it shorter. I also thought she did an amazing job at integrating the quote. The facts that were given in the quote really helped the reader understand the vastness of the human trafficking industry. Finally, I thought she did a good job in making her article flow well. The way she structured it made it easy to follow and I felt like one idea followed the other in a very organize, flowy way.
Although most of the review was well written she could improve in some areas. I saw a few grammatical and spelling mistakes which could be easily fixed with better editing skills. Also, she could have talked more about the science behind the DNA stuff, instead of talking solely about human trafficking.
Finally, I was very surprised to hear that the human trafficking industry is the second largest industry behind drugs. This is something I never would have guessed and gives you a perspective on how much of an issue this truly is and their needs to be measures taken to stop it.
I thought Krises synopsis on this article was very intriguing I thought that she did a good job in keeping the review short and easy to read for the reader, but made it very understandable at the same time.The facts that were given in the quote really helped the reader understand the vastness of the human trafficking industry. This article pertains to all of us because we can all think of a teenage girl and imagine someone her age going through this. Although this article was well presented Krise had some repetitive words. She also could of made it sound a lot more intense then she did with more descriptive language and stories. Other then those small flaws i saw, Krissy did a great job in summarizing this fascinating article for me. THANKS
Krissy did an excellent job of reviewing the DNA and Human Trafficking. In her review of the article she did a great job of summarizing concisely by focusing on the key points. I also though that it was very interesting to see her perspective on how DNA has benefited the criminal justice system; I agree with Krissy, that the article is misleading at first but as the reader looks further the topic becomes clearer. The reference to Disneyland in her summary helped me understand the article because it was something I could relate to. Overall, Krissy did a great job but to improve her summary Krissy could have more information about the Internet and how that has impacted the human trafficking business. After reading the article and her review, I did not realize that DNA would have so much of an impact of trying to prevent human trafficking.
I think Krissy did a really nice job of describing the article in detail without just spitting facts at us. The facts she did use however, were really important and helped me realize the magnitude of this problem in our society. I also really liked the way she made it relatable to us as a reader because everybody does know a person who could potentially be a victim of this problem. She also did a nice job of keeping the summery short but putting a lot of information that helped make this article understandable. I do think however, she could of put in more detail about how the DNA can help in this field. Also there were a few grammatical errors but they didn’t make a big difference. I am defiantly impressed in the idea that DNA can help solve crimes that have to do with human trafficking.
I think Krissy chose a very interesting article on a tough and controversial subject. I think she did a great job in summarizing this article because there was a lot of difficult detail and subject manner. Additionally, I liked the fact that she chose an article that pertains to all of us; especially teenage girls, because the subject is something that we can all relate to and feel sorry to these victims of trafficking. The summary was very easy to understand and she included the most important points in her synopsis.
The way she talks about DNA and human trafficking shows that she understands the subject manner really well, which impressed me a lot. You also made this article relatable to many of us by not only talking about the scientific controversies in this article, but the moral ones too. At some times, I felt the summary was a bit repetitive, especially when talking about the DNA testing, however I still think she did a great job of connecting the topics together and putting her own voice into it. Additionally, there were some grammar mistakes in the summary; however, they didn’t effect explaining the message of the article. Before reading this article and summary, I had no idea that the numbers in trafficking were so high and that it is such a huge business. I think spreading the message about what can be done to help prevent this from expanding into an even greater system is very important and that DNA testing will certainly be very helpful.
I thought krissy's review of "DNA and human trafficking" was well done. I really enjoyed the topic as it is controversial topic yet it seemed relatable. I enjoyed the review I found it short, simple and generally easy to follow. I thought the quote was placed perfectly it broke up the scientific stuff in the right place to remind that this a real issue occurring for many people all across the globe. I also enjoyed the structure of the review I liked in particular that she got all the scientific and factual information out of the way before providing her personal opinion on the article and topic. Although I overall enjoyed the review some changes could be made such as punctuation, the punctuation was all over the place more time could have on editing. Another thing I noticed was an inconsistent connection between human trafficking and DNA a bit of clarification would have nice. One surprising thing I learned was that human trafficking industry is the second largest industry behind drugs. Overall the review was well done and I enjoyed it
Krissy definitely chose an interesting article, on a topic that is tough to talk about. She summarized the article very well, and included a lot of of detail on this difficult subject matter. She kept her summary short, but didn't leave out any key information necessary for the reader. The facts that she provided, especially from the quote, really allowed the reader to get a grasp of the size of the human trafficking industry.
Although this article summary was written well, there were a few small details that Krissy could have been improved, such as her general grammar and word usage. She also could have gone into more detail about how DNA was discussed in this article.
Before reading this article summary I had no idea truly how large the human trafficking industry really was. I never imagined it would be the second largest illegal industry, only surpassed by drugs.
I appreciate the clarity and simple language in Krissy’s review. She mentions DNA, the criminal justice system, the Innocence Project, and human trafficking, and that DNA can help capture criminals. She also ends with saying that Asplen “made a compelling argument to why DNA could really put a dent in human trafficking,” which is a logical conclusion for someone reading the article and review to accept.
Although Krissy mentions many good points in her review, she misses the argument that DNA tests should be taken post conviction in order to curb human trafficking, and this information would help support her conclusion. I also agree with some of the other reviews that the grammar wasn’t perfect, but it is an easy fix.
Before reading the article and its review, I never realized that DNA could help curb human trafficking; in fact I didn’t know that there were many forms of human trafficking.
In this review, the writer talks about the importance of DNA testing in human trafficking, and how its development aids in not only providing evidence that can convict a criminal, but also prove an exonerated prisoner innocent. The writer explains that this DNA testing can encourage a victim to share more about their experiences with abusers. She also explains that this encouragement can help police better understand human trafficking patterns and relations, which would make the job of tracking human trafficking criminals less difficult.
The review could have provided more details about how DNA provides the sort of "safety net" that it does, not only in backing claims with physical evidence, but why knowing that DNA testing is available would provide victims with the confidence to reveal more about their circumstances. Another aspect of the review that could be improved was providing examples of the arguments Chris Asplen made that did not connect to the article in the way that the writer was expecting. She says that Asplen provides a persuasive argument, but what topics of consideration did not relate to the original argument? How so?
One aspect of the review with which I was impressed was the writer's ability to articulate the magnitude of the issue of human trafficking. She provided the reader with not only numerical evidence, but she used more relatable examples through her facts, such as stating that most victims are young teenage girls, then going on to explain to the reader that we all know teenage girls/teenagers. This provides the reader with guidance to think about the horrors that each human in human trafficking rings experiences more horrors on a daily basis than most do in a lifetime, all at an extremely young age. I was unaware, before reading the review, that the human trafficking business holds the second largest profit margin in illegal trafficking (illegal substance trafficking being first).
Krissy’s review of the article “DNA and Human Trafficking” is very interesting. The article is about how the use of DNA profiling can, and will, put an end to human trafficking. Krissy did a good job explaining the article clearly and simply. The article seems to not need to be brought into detail, which Krissy did not do. It was good of her to realize and do this. Krissy also did a good job on describing the severity of the human trafficking industry. She perfectly utilized the quote from the article and gave very good background. Krissy also did a good job with effectively criticizing the author’s choice of content in the article. The assignment asks for something the author did not do effectively, but Krissy effectively took it a step farther to criticize the author’s larger choices.
Although the review was well written, it could use some minor improvements. For example, Krissy could have explained more about the larger point on the article being proving the wrongly convicted innocent. She did not mention this a lot, even though it is one of the two important parts of the article. Krissy could have also explained a bit about how exactly DNA analysis will help to stop human trafficking. She explained that it can, but does not explain how.
Krissy’s review impressed me by bringing light again to how large human trafficking is. It is a topic that is usually overlooked and disregarded, even though it so huge. Krissy’s review was definitely a good read.
Reading Krissy's review of DNA and Human Trafficking by Chris Asplen exposed me to a problem I did not even know existed. She wrote this review with finesse; making sure she proofread it to get rid of any grammatical errors. Including quotes from the article was also a good idea because it shows legitimacy. A lot of information from Asplen's article was in the review so the reader would know what it was about without having the article in sight. Her analysis was also included which I liked, but I feel that it could have been elaborated more. There was not an even balance between facts and opinion. I also had to read the review a couple of times to understand what how DNA was related to Human Trafficking. It was not clear to me on the first go around. Before reading this review, I did not know that 27 million men, women, and children a year are victims of modern slavery that brings in $32 billion a year. It is obvious that this is a problem around the world when the criminals involved are able to bring in so much revenue.
After reading Krissy’s article of “DNA and Human Trafficking” I thought she did a great job. Krissy did a great job at summarizing the article. I thought she did a great job on getting the main points of the article out, which makes it easy for the reader. The way she krissy kept her summary short and to the point really helped to make it overall flow better. Gave a lot of good information about the DNA and how it relates to human Trafficking. I thought that Krissy could improve her article by talking a little more about the actually process of DNA and how forensic scientists are used to help stop human trafficking. Talking more about the science behind the DNA could have made it a bit more interesting. After reading this article I was really interested to see how the DNA could be used to help stop human trafficking. I thought this article was very well written and presented by Krissy.
Will Duncan Current events
Forensics 12.4.13
DNA and Human Trafficking review
One thing I liked about this article was how all the facts were presented. Another thing I liked was her own strong personal review of the article and her thoughts on it. Another thing I like was the article it self because I did not know very much about this topic and it intrigued me. One thing that could have been a little more clear was how exactly DNA could cause human trafficking to screeching halt. Another aspect that could have been improved was the overall summary of the article. One thing that I never knew until reading this article was that 27 million men, women, and children are victims of modern slavery.
I find the complicated subject of human trafficking in today's society to be highly interesting. Krissy, you picked an extremely interesting article. I especially liked how it connects to us, especially teenage girls because it makes it more real thinking that something so horrible could be happening to a girl our age close by. I would be thrilled to have more people working to put an end to it. Although this article had some good information I wish they delved into this topic and what DNA fully plans to do to put a stop to human trafficking. I am always thrilled to see new ways to put a stop to injustice in our world. I wish there was more detail about how they plan to use DNA to help. This article was a bit lacking in information but Krissy managed to connect the main points of the article and explained it very well. Good job, Krissy! Besides the article being a tad confusing and thus making the summary a bit confusing to follow I thought Krissy did an excellent job. This summary made me want to do more research on this subject and find out exactly how DNA is going to help human trafficking.
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